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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays, It is argued that supermarkets should sell only local
products
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instead
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 of imports from other countries. In
this
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 essay, I am going to explain the reason why I strongly disagree with the statement and
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 I will give some examples.
Firstly
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, I believe that international commerce has recently improved thanks to the development of new ways of moving
products
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. In fact, in modern society, we can buy every kind of
food
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 which is grown,
for example
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, on the other side of the World and
this
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 is caused by the efficiency in the
food
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 chain.
Moreover
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, I think that supermarkets have to sell these kinds of
products
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 in order to offer a variety of
food
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 and for creating a balanced diet for customers.
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, others argued that big labels should sell only
products
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 produced in their own country due to the fact that it can improve and raise the revenue of national companies as a consequence that there will be an increase in the economy.
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 some people believe that it is important to consume only national
food
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, I believe that international trading could be essential for the country in light of the fact that it can export its typical
products
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 and increase the profit for local companies. In conclusion, several citizens think that it is important to eat local
food
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 and supermarkets must sell only national
products
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,
on the contrary
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, I believe that it is essential to have the possibility to chose whatever we want while we are buying in markets and
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 international trading is a great opportunity for developing the country’s economy.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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