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In many situations, people who break the law should be warned instead of punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Breaking
law
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the law
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 is indeed a growing concern in
the
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apply
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society. Some feel that
law breakers
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lawbreakers
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 should be warned
instead
 of punished. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement as strict punishment may look very crucial in society, but is very much required for the public. These days many people take advantage of
this
law
, as only warning encourages criminal behaviour in public or person.
For example
, if an individual; is arrested for a narcotics
offense
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offence
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, there is a strong chance that
this
 incident will become a permanent criminal record.
This
 makes it difficult for the individual’s career. One of the main reasons why I think is if not punished
than
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then
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 he will be encouraged and will repeat the similar behaviour or it encourages the public opinion that
law
 is not for our safety.
Moreover
, other crimes like robbery, killer etc should
also
 be punished. Punishment appears to be more harm but
still
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 the
law
 has to be strictly followed . Warning may be preferable for only minor cases
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