Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Decision
making is an important aspect of human life from birth to death bed. When
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considering
childhood,various
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decisions
are
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by
children
which are right as well as wrong. The
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degree
degrees
of freedom for
mistakes
that a child should be allowed has been a
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subject Allowing
children
to make
mistakes
have several advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
,one
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positive
of allowing
mistakes
is that it allows
children
to learn and gain valuable experience.
secondly
,they become aware
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the continuously allowing
children
to make
mistakes
can
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resulted
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them being addicted or face
life threatening
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situations. For
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example,if a child is
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allowed
to make errors on road,it can eventuality lead to serious accidents as well.
On the other hand
,total involvement of adults and blocking all
mistakes
from
children
could make them safe and improve
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between
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parents
and
children
as well.
However
,once the
children
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set free
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society ,
then
they may find it difficult to
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challenges on their own. Put it simply, they will be more
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on their parents rather than being independent.
Moreover
,
children
will
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lose
love
the opportunity of learning
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through
their
mistakes
when their parents block
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from happening every time. In conclusion, allowing
mistakes
can be a
learningadvantage
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learning advantage
for
children
while
limit
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the limit
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of those
mistakes
needed to be judged properly by an adult to ensure
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at
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the child. In my opinion ,it should be
mix
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a mix
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of allowing and not allowing
mistakes
depending on the situation that makes a smart person in future.
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