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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's most developing and fast-growing world technology make building
construction
 easy and rapid. In regards to that, half of the people think, those big skyscrapers in cities should be constructed by the government authorities.
However
, others are completely opposite and believed, it is monitoring the responsibilities of those people who make a building. While I find
this
 view of some people justifiable to some extent, I
also
 argue that
construction
 should be under control by the person or company who made that building.
Firstly
, one convincing argument can be made that, government do not have enough time or money to controlled big
buildings
 as they have a lot of work to do.
Additionally
, it means that, if
construction
 company spend their money on
the
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development, it is their responsibility to follow some
rules
 and regulations about
construction
 as well as safety
rules
. Let's take Auckland City
Council
, as an example, They made some
rules
 about building
construction
 in CBD
such
 as certain levels of the building, fire exits and more. Here, the more creative design comes if an individual person takes responsibility for making
buildings
. On the other side, it is
also
 undeniable that the
council
 has some special departments that just monitor and approve building structures.
Furthermore
, the
council
 have some specific type of
rules
 regarding developments which builder have to follow. The best relevant instance, Christchurch City
council
, which made some
rules
 about high-rise
buildings
 because of earthquakes frequently. So that protects all their citizens during evacuation.
Thus
, it can be concluded that
,
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 the government just have the right to make some
rules
 that protect and are no harm to anyone.
Otherwise
,
its
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 the full responsibility of that finance company or person whoever involved in the
construction
 of those kinds of
a big
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big buildings
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buildings
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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