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Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only; others, however, feel cell phones should be used mostly for work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today’s world, it is considered by some that it is better for mobile
phones
 to be used only for individual purposes, while there are others who claim they are intended mainly for work.
This
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phones
 at home or at
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 workplace, and give examples
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 both views. Despite the fact that
phones
 are quite convenient due to their functions and the internet, I tend to believe they are more about pleasure.
To begin
 with, mobile
phones
 are one of the biggest breakthroughs in
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history and
widely
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 used in the entertainment sphere. It is clear that nowadays majority of youth try to give a shot to
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blogging, making the most of their smartphones as they can mostly complete
such
 activities as taking pictures, shooting videos and mounting them.
In addition
, owning a smartphone is the most comfortable way to keep in touch with your acquaintances no matter where you are and watch your favourite films and shows, the popularity of which is reflected in the number of using the services like Netflix and YouTube.
Finally
, imagine an urgent midnight call from your office that can be considered as
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infiltration of personal space, which will make you feel sleep-deprived
next
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 day.
This
 is the reason why cell
phones
 should be used only for personal purposes.
On the other hand
, mobile
phones
 are extensively used in
majority
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 of the spheres of the world in order to reach
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maximum productivity. Basically,
phones
 handle tasks like improving the quality of customer service, developing the interaction between the employees and speeding up the different processes at the office.
Moreover
, it would be better if the workers use their
phones
 mainly for the aims mentioned above, since the presence of social media, calls and messages from
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friends may interrupt the person, which will lead to
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 decline in
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efficiency. To conclude,
although
 the mentioned cutting-edge technology achieves some improvements in increasing productivity at a workplace, it is not easy for some to draw a line between personal life and work and,
as a result
, the working atmosphere will be destroyed. From my point of view, it is essential to keep the balance and use cell
phones
 moderately both at home and at the office.
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