You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear

Dear Abhi, I hope
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letter finds you in good health and spirits. I was delighted to know that you are planning encamping during your break to PEI which is one of the most popular
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among the campers. Well, I would say summer is the best time for camping, as you are
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astrophile by nature you would love star gazing.
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place has a small trek you can
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have a trekking experience
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are a few drawbacks of camping, but I am sure you can manage that with preventive measures. I would recommend, carrying a portable mattress to have a good and comfortable sleep which would
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avoid back pain and migraine. I would
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take the required medication to abstain from any health issues, which might ruin your trip. I
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wanted to accompany you for camping, but unfortunately, I have my final exams during that period. I am really excited to hear about your camping experience once you are back. I look forward to hearing from you amazing camping stories. With Regards, JK
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. Although most of your paragraphs do this well, there's a bit of overlap in descriptions and advice that could be clearer with a more distinct separation.
complete response
Include all parts of the task prompt more explicitly in the structure. For instance, the disadvantages could be elaborated and clearly sectioned off to enhance the completeness of your response.
suitable writing tone
The tone of writing is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend. It maintains an excellent balance between informal and informative.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and give the letter a personal touch, which is very effective for this kind of task.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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