Computers have made the world a better place to live in. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today, we are surrounded by computers in every aspect of our
life
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: work, study, entertainment, etc.
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would lead to
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idea that the development of
such
machinery would ease our
lifes
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, since the process of "thinking" occurs much faster, just within
a
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seconds,
comparing
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to human beings.
However
, there are numerous topics from ordinary
people
on the
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it might
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, especially in terms of replacing
people
with soulless machines or coded programs. They don'
t
need to be fed, don'
t
require sleep to rest, don'
t
ask many questions or start a conflict if opinions don'
t
match, and, most importantly - require no payment.
Although
the picture of future humanity in
such
circumstances is terrifying, since we all are "supposed to lose our jobs and eventually be enslaved by high-intelligent robots" like in a common sci-fi movie or book, personally, I like the idea of allowing
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computers or robots to replace
people
in factories,
for example
. At least,
this
would provide safety
amoung
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among
workers, since they wouldn'
t
get hurt. I've
also
experienced the positive tendencies from a breakout of Artificial Intelligence, which, for me, significantly changed my workaround, providing calculations, suggestions,
analysis
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and analysis
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within seconds. Not only that, but computers actually
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people
with work, and I'm talking about
game
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the game
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dev industry. Gamers all over the world are eager to buy and play a quality product and for
that
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a company need around 300-1000 specialists in all sorts of things: coding, scenery, producing,
digital-art
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, voice acting, motion capture and that list has not even started yet. For their consumers - the computer would be a door to a safe place, where they can ease their mind, help with anxiety, and even find some friends online.
To sum up
. I am inspired by those who had
such
a great mind to put
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some electronic parts together, find a way to fire it up and eventually,
ending
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up with a box that boosted
up
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the
technilogical
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technological
progress decades ahead. I do believe, that
with
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understanding the importance of
computer's
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computer
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capabilities and, if
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in
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right use, we'll be able to
acheive
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achieve
the brightest future possible.
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