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Computers have made the world a better place to live in. Do you agree or disagree?

#computers #world #place
Today we can'
t
 imagine our life without
computer
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a computer
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 or
phone
. We use it all
time
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the time
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: reading news, communicating with friends and relatives, posting new photos, paying bills, playing games etc. It's great, we can get
know
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to know
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 about
situation
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the situation
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 in the
wourld
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world
, ask about the health of our parents and even buy needed things without leaving
home
. But as
usual
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usual,
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 there are advantages and disadvantages of digital technologies. First of all, the main advantage is that we can study or work without leaving
home
 and
this
 way spend more
time
 with family. As for me, it's great, because I can work at
home
 and don'
t
 think how to get
in to
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into
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office
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the office
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 or how much
time
 I need to get there. Now in quarantine
time
, it's even more important, I can arrange my work at
home
 and
don'
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not
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t
 think about
Covid
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COVID-19
.
Also
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Also,
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 there are a
lot
 of projects and
medicine
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medicines
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, that were created with
computer
 help. It helps us to develop the world and develop our personal skills
,
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apply
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 since we have access to all books, newspapers and articles just by using
phone
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our phone
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. But on another hand, children spend a
lot
 of
time
 playing games and unfortunately, it may cause different diseases. They don'
t
 wish to play
game
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games
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 on the street, go for a walk and especially study. A
lot
 of
childs
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children
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 can'
t
 imagine even a minute without
phone
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a phone
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 and parents or teachers can do nothing with it, it's like a disease. So when we can arrange our
time
 and children's
time
with
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by
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computer
 or
phone
 - it's great, because there are a
lot
 of important and interesting things we can get
know
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to know
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 with
computer
 help.
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