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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #education #children #years #age
Some people believe that face-to-face
education
 shouldn't begin earlier than
usual
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age
 of kids,
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whilst
while
 others argued with the statement that
children
 should
educated
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educate
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 in the
schools
 before 7 years of
age
. It is argued that they should not go to
the
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schools
 until their seven.
This
 essay will discuss both
of
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views and give reasons about when
children
 should start getting knowledge in
education
 places. The formal
education
 that
learned
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is learned
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 is difficult to understand for young kids.All of the subjects and
informations
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information
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 are made for 7 years old
children
.
That is
 why
this
 kind of knowledge
not
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is not
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 easy to learn for
youngers
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younger
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 one.If they start to study
in
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their
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 earlier
age
,they will face
with
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stress in middle
schools
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school
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.
Children
 until school
age
 should spend free
times
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time
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 with
parients
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parents
patients
 or
friens
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friends
 by making life more enjoyable.
On the other hand
,starting study from younger
age
 might help to easily find in what subject group they interested.Many
of
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humans like to goof around ,in the
end
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 lost their gold times.Starting formal
education
 earlier than usual is
usefull
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useful
 to give more available information for them
For instance
,
child
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the child
a child
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 may interested in sciences subject and can develop the better skills than others one. To
concude
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conclude
,
the
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 both opinions of humanity have
own
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their own
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 positive sides.Not
starting
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 go to
the
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schools
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school
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 until the 7 years is
more
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better because of
difficult
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the difficult
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 information to take for young ones.
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