Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that face-to-face
education
shouldn't begin earlier than
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age
of kids,
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whilst
while
others argued with the statement that
children
should
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in the
schools
before 7 years of
age
. It is argued that they should not go to
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schools
until their seven.
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essay will discuss both
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views and give reasons about when
children
should start getting knowledge in
education
places. The formal
education
that
learned
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is difficult to understand for young kids.All of the subjects and
informations
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information
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are made for 7 years old
children
.
That is
why
this
kind of knowledge
not
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easy to learn for
youngers
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younger
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one.If they start to study
in
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their
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earlier
age
,they will face
with
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stress in middle
schools
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school
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.
Children
until school
age
should spend free
times
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with
parients
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parents
patients
or
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friends
by making life more enjoyable.
On the other hand
,starting study from younger
age
might help to easily find in what subject group they interested.Many
of
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humans like to goof around ,in the
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lost their gold times.Starting formal
education
earlier than usual is
usefull
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useful
to give more available information for them
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,
child
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the child
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may interested in sciences subject and can develop the better skills than others one. To
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conclude
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both opinions of humanity have
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positive sides.Not
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go to
the
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schools
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school
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until the 7 years is
more
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better because of
difficult
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the difficult
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information to take for young ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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