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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Write an essay expressing your point of view

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There is always a debate about what to do in
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time
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. Some segment of the population believes that it is very important to
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time
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 doing some brain-building activities whereas, some
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 to rest their
mind
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 whenever, they get some
leisure
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time
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. I believe, that it’s important to rest the
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 during break
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, I
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 believe that it can be beneficial for the individual to indulge in some activities
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 as reading or doing word puzzles. Doing some brain-building activities during free
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 can help in changing focus, which in return boost the creativity and can help one to look at a
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 from a different point of
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 is simply because while doing some puzzles or reading, we completely switch off the part of the brain which we were using to solve problems prior to the break. So, after break
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, when we try to solve the
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, we look at the
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 from a whole different
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, which in turn helps in solving the
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 more quickly. I remember during my engineering years, I was stuck in a project trying to build an algorithm to segregate a big database.
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, I was feeling stuck so during break
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, I and one of my friends decided to play a small puzzle game, after the break when I went back to solve the task. I relooked the algorithm, from a new point of
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, as I understand what I did prior to taking a break, and I was able to solve the segmentation
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 easily after that using a new point of
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.
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, Relaxing during
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 is
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 equally valuable. It’s because when someone starts a task or
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 with a fresh
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 they can easily give a lot of concentration and can contain a lot of information in their
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 which they can
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 to solve the
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 quickly.
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, during exam
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, I always
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 to make sure that I get enough sleep of 8 hours to keep a fresh
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. Which I used to
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 during my exam. It used to help me a lot as while writing it was easy for me to remember the values in the question for a longer period of
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. In conclusion, I believe that people should be maintaining a balance of what to do in their
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time
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 as I think that doing both resting your
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 as word puzzles or reading can be beneficial for the individual.
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