Some parents believe that cell phones are harmful to children while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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modern society, almost all levels of society
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using mobile
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, including but not limited to
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below the age of 18 years old. Some parents argue that handphonesphones are detrimental to
children
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.
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,
on the other hand
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, other parents believe that mobile
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bring more benefits than drawbacks to
children
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. In the following paragraphs, I will enunciate and compare both perspectives before address my personal opinion.
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off, it is undeniable that today cell
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combined with the internet have become a very powerful tool. People can access any kind of information and do many
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, including but not limited to conduct study
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from a single mobile
phone
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.
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, during the pandemic period
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are not allowed to go to school. So, as an
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they conduct the learning
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and connect with the teachers and other teammates by using mobile
phones
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. So,
children
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can learn many kinds of literature and perspectives from mobile
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.
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, there are a lot of negative content in a single mobile
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, including but not limited to online gambling, porn content, and games. All of them may influence the
children
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in a bad or negative way. As the result, the
children
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may be trapped in a bad situation and lose their future. To exemplify, one of my friends learned gambling
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through his mobile
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when he was a child. Today, he leave the city because of the debt that occurred from gambling.
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, indeed mobile
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phone
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may be destructive to
children
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. Based on the foregoing, we can conclude that even though the mobile
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is very useful and helpful but
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can bring negative influences to
children
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and affect the
children
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future.
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, based on my personal perspective, I believe that
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can access mobile
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restrictively under the supervision of their parents.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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