Some people believe that modern technology encourages more sociable behaviour. Others say that this leads to lesser sociable behaviour. Discuss both views with examples and provide your opinion.

The is no doubt that
technology
is giving new way for
people
keeping
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in touch with their friends and family by using
Internet
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.
This
phenomenon is offering manifold benefits to
people
, while it
also
bringing some disadvantages,
such
as
less
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social with others. The following paragraphs will analyze both
of
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views and give my opinion. On the one hand, the various social media applications,
for
example
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Facebook, Facetime,
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the
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those
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apps which provide the functions that give
people
online chats and online interviews. 
Although
many international
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leaving own country for studying, he or she still can use related websites or applications to in touch other
people
whom they would love to despite they do not stay the same nation. It is clear that anyone won't be limited by time or space, it can easier communicate with others.
On the other hand
,
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negative side,
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technology
also
can pose a threat to
people
's
socal
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social
skills,
for
instance
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communication and interpersonal skills. The main reason is they do not understand how do they do during the conversation. It would cause
people
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up
interactive
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with each other in real life.
Finally
, it can lead to con-social behaviours in the real world. Another fact can be seen is
people
preference
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prefer
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using the
electroic
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electronic
products to contact business clients or relatives rather than using
face-to-face
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method because it is not only more
convience
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convenience
to connect
,
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but
also
do not waste of time. In conclusion, the changes
of
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technology
is
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necessary for society, it
improve
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the quality of our living. The most
improtant
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important
is
people
should know the pros and cons when they using the new
technology
, and remember the new
technology
just decrease the
inconvience
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inconvenience
issues in our life, it
do
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not represent can solve all of the problems we meet.
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