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Teachers used to convey information, but now students have access to a wide resources of information, there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#teachers #information #students #access #resources #role #education
In the modern era,
students
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enormous sources of
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 due to the advancement of
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technologies, namely the internet.
Therefore
,
teachers
, who play a vital role in disseminating information to
students
 are devalued as a useless career. In my opinion, I strongly believe that
teachers
 are imperative for
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modern
education
 because they do not only teach and provide
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knowledge to
students
, but they
also
 teach
students
 the art of living.
First
 of all,
although
 the resources of information can be easily accessed by the internet,
teacher
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 still
play
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 the vital role in taking
care
children
, especially aged less than 10 years old. According to the researches published by
Ministry
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 of
education
 in 2020, the
children
 in
this
stages
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 need specific
care
 from their parents or
teachers
 as they cannot take
care
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themselves
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, and cannot focus on the lesson, without
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supervision
from
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teachers
.
For example
, they always cry when living alone, and they are easily distracted by video games
instead
 of
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online lesson.
Secondly
,
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modern
education
 through
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online learning will never
supercede
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supersede
teachers
 because it cannot teach the
students
 about
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socialization and the art of living, which sometimes these skills are more important than the
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 taught in the class.
Children
 can only develop these skills by interacting with each other in the real world.
For instance
, in the class,
teachers
 always interact with
students
 by asking them
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questions and have the time before starting the class called the homeroom,
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 both of them spend 15 minutes
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 with each other
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 the situation happening
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yesterday. In conclusion, as
children
 are not a robot, they cannot be uploaded information and knowledge by searching from the internet. For
this
 reason,
teachers
 still play a vital role in the
education
 aspect as they can provide
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special
care
 to
children
 and teach
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essentially
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 soft skills to them.
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