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Level of youth crime are increasing rapidly on most cities around the world what are the reasons for this and suggests some solutions.

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Juvenile crimes are increasing day by day.
Although
 the public is aware of the penalties, crime rates are not coming down.
Moreover
, these kinds of students could be a threat to the society in future.
This
 essay will discuss the major reasons for
this
 problem and possible solutions
also
.
To begin
 with, a lack of moral values is the major reason for
this
 particular problem.
Moreover
, parent's negligence, peer pressure and internet addiction have
also
 played a vital role.
For example
, a research report from Punjab University, India showed that social media like
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 and WhatsApp are mostly used by students aged between twelve to seventeen.
In addition
, another research conducted by Rajiv Gandhi University proved that the children of working partners are likely to commit more mistakes when compared with
a
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single working
parents
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. To summarize, the unnoticeable circumstances insisting a
child
 commit
offence
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the offence
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.
On the contrary
, the behaviour of a
child
 can be improved by teaching the importance of following basic life values.
This
 can be easily implemented by the grandparents in the house during each stage of a kid's development. Along with
this
, the
parents
 should spend some quality time with their children irrespective of their busy schedules.
Besides
 everything, it is mandatory to observe the
child
, when he uses the internet.
Likewise
, both the
parents
 and teachers should help the
child
 to identify good peer groups. To summarize, monitoring and guiding the children whenever and wherever it is necessary to help them to grow as
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socially acceptable human
being
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.
Finally
, it is the ultimate responsibility of the
parents
 to direct the
child
 to the right way.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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