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Celebrities make a very good living out of media attention and have chosen to live in the public spotlight. They have no right to complain when they feel the media are intruding on their privacy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, the entertainment industry is more and more developing thanks to the help of social
media
. Some
people
 believed that celebrities have a good living standard is based on the public spotlight and that why they have no right to complain the public is violating their privacy.
This
 essay aims to disagree with the above notice and give some arguments to rebuttal it. The right to privacy is applied to all human beings without exception. Without the light of the stage, the celebrities are just normal
people
 like all of us and they have the right to enjoy private time. As the result, if they do not take part in an event or live show, it is true to respect their private life. Other than that, it is inevitable that social television has a negative influence on well-known
people
 nowadays. With the eye of the paparazzi, they might be careful with every gesture in the daily activities
such
 as do what they want, love
people
 they truly love or even the way they eat without comfortable. They are not animals in zoos, which society can control. They spent most of their life for entertaining as well as inspiring for their fans in many aspects of lives. As the result, they deserve to enjoy the weekend and have their break time without any distraction from the
media
. In conclusion, the legal to privacy is for all human beings and celebrities are not an exception. They work and can be stressed during the working process like us or even more. Because of the negative effect of
media
, they are more and more stressed, and it can lead to their mental breakout. In the past, there are some examples of the immoral of social
media
 that cause the case of self-violence. As the result, it is necessary of educating as well as raising the awareness of the paparazzi nowadays to respect not only famous
people
 but
also
 others.
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