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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #culture #character #choice #clothes
It is opined that
majority
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 of the traditions and characteristics of an individual can be judged from their
choice
 of
clothes
. Some people agree with
this
, and some believe
opposite
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the opposite
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. I strongly acknowledge
this
 statement, as stated in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,
clothes
 provide a brief description
about
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of
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 the culture of an individual. Our world is full of vast cultures. It is the cloth only
which
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that
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 acts as a medium to communicate a
person
's culture. It benefits
the
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society as
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the viewer
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viewer
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viewers
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 can treat the
person
accordingly
.
In addition
 to that, it acts as a way of representing their beliefs. Nowadays, people are forgetting their ancestral thoughts,
clothes
 help them to conserve them and pass on to their future generation, which helps to
upbring
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bring
 their community.
Also
, that makes them work according to their beliefs which can be beneficial for their future generations.
For instance
, our grandparents still wear traditional
clothes
, so that newer ones can understand their thoughts and spread
to
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them to
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 other people. Having said that,
choice
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the choice
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 of
clothes
help
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helps
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 in knowing the character of an individual. A gentleman will always wear something
that is
 related to
its
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his
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 profession.
This
 helps in gaining
the
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apply
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respect from other individuals.
However
, a
person
 wearing untidy
clothes
 will always be unprofessional
from
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of
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 other persons.
Moreover
,
choice
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the choice
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 of
clothes
tell
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tells
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 the creativity of a
person
. It
also
 boosts the morale of an individual.
Other
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Another person
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person
 will easily determine whether how to treat a
person
 who is properly
dressed-up
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dressed up
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.
For example
, a
person
 will wear
formal
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a formal
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 dress,
that is
,
blazer
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a blazer
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 and trousers, for a formal meeting. To sum up,
choice
 of
clothes
 provide much detailed information to viewers, in relation to their cultures and character as it acts as
a
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non-verbal communication.
Therefore
, it is advisable to remain properly dressed up at all
the
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times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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