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In some countries, men and women are having children late in life. What are the reasons for this development? Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

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The six pie charts illustrate the
water
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 usage in six areas of the world namely, North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Centra
Asia
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, South East
Asia
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 for different purposes( Industrial
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, Agricultural
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, Domestic
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) in terms of percentages. Overall, North
America
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 and Europe consumed a higher proportion of
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 for Industrial
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 and least for domestic
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 along with South East
Asia
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. Whereas
Agriculture
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 was the highest priority among the other four countries and industrial
use
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 was given the least priority except for South-East
Asia
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. North
America
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 used almost half of the
water
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 percentage for industrial
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, 39% for
Agriculture
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, the rest for Domestic. In Europe, the usage follows the same trend with just above 50% for Industry, 32% for
Agriculture
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 and remaining 15% for Domestic
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. Coming to the rest of the countries,
Agriculture
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 was given the utmost priority with 71% in South
America
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, 81%, 84%, 88% in South-East
Asia
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 respectively. South
America
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 used 19% and 10
%
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of
water
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 for Domestic and Industrial
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 respectively. Africa and Central
Asia
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 followed a similar trend with 9%, 7% and 7%, 5% for Domestic and Industrial
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 respectively. South-East
Asia
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 used 12% for industries and the remaining 7% for Domestic purposes.
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