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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #health #future
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It is often argued that the
health
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 standards of the
future
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generation
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 will be low when compared to the present
generation
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. In my opinion, I completely agree that the
people
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 in
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 will have a lot of problems related to
health
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 when compared to us.
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, with the advancement in
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, we live in a global village as communication has brought all of us together when compared with the previous
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. Because of
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, the competition has
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 been raised a lot in order to succeed. So, the general population will now have to do a lot of
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 to be in the job market.
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 brings on high
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 pressure, as many more talented
people
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 are there to replace you. To overcome
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,
people
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 might become more career-driven and to compensate for
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,
health
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 will be pushed on the backseat. Already, in the IT industry, almost 40% of the
people
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 believe that because of project deadlines, they are unable to take time out for their daily exercises and family.
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, it is believed that
people
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 will be more aware of their
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 in the
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 as compared to now. Despite
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, I think that because of advancements in
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, the young
generation
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 will not be willing to put in the hard
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 and time towards fitness. The young
generation
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, seeing their parents working all the time, will become result-oriented. So, because of
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, as well as the advancement in
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, they will be even more dependent on
technology
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 to solve tasks and problems. In conclusion, irrespective of the fact that
people
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 will be more informed about their body,
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 believe that
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 the
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 pressure and the advancement in
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 will damage the
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 of the
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generation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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