Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A group of individuals present the view that the teenage years are the happiest era in most people's lives.
Whereas
Others believe that adulthood gives more enjoyment, despite additional obligations. I strongly believe in the former first view.
On the one hand , there is almost no doubt that teenagers have enough time for fun. In fact, they don’t have any Linking Words
responsibilities
, as free as a bird, they experience the world and enjoy their formative years, Use synonyms
in other words
, they live with carefree attitudes, free of responsibility. Linking Words
Additionally
make the most of their youth, pursuing hobbies and interests. Linking Words
For example
, when teenagers are invited to a party they accept it regardless considering time and location, just to have fun. Linking Words
However
many people usually remember those days as their happiest.
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On the other hand
, there are those who believe the Linking Words
responsibilities
of adults bring a sense of purpose and fulfilment, leading to greater happiness. Of course the key to being happy free time without each type of responsibility. Perhaps adults are happy with Providing care, love, and support to their children, Use synonyms
as well as
meeting their children's needs, Linking Words
such
as food, shelter, and education which could contribute to a sense of satisfaction and happiness in activities that bring them pleasure and joy. Linking Words
For example
, a person of mature age could support others in order to financial they may be satisfied with it. Linking Words
As a result
, having Linking Words
responsibilities
could cause happiness for them .
In conclusion, Use synonyms
while
adults could be happy in order to have Linking Words
responsibilities
and commitment, I am in agreement with Use synonyms
this
view that teenagers have happy moments because nothing has Linking Words
responsibilities
.Use synonyms
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