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Some believe in enrolling their children into the best schools so that they learn to socialize while others believe that homeschooling is a better option. Discuss both views and where do you stand on this topic?

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Generally, a solid foundational
education
 is important for our kids. With
this
, they will grow to be very intelligent and possess high quantitative reasoning.
However
, all these are determined by the kind of
education
 given to the
child
 at the toddler and teenage levels.
Education
 can be attained either on the
school
 premises or at home (homeschooling).
This
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 two has a different effect on the pupil. To buttress
this
, homeschooling has some limiting factors which can affect the foundation of the teen compared to the other
such
 as: limiting the interactive aspect of a
child
 which can result in low communication skills of the
child
 later in the future and affect the self-esteem of the
child
.
Nevertheless
, It
also
 has its benefits like;
this
 will help the teacher to carry out close supervision on the kids each time they are been taught at home.
Also
, because of their few numbers tutor can thoroughly teach each pupil well.
On the other hand
, registering a
child
 into a standard
school
 gives a lot of benefits to the
child
, because the
child
 is given the best
education
 from professionals in a
school
.
This
 helps the
child
 to build high self-esteem because the
child
 is not just able to learn in the classroom but
also
 from the facilities and in the environment.
In addition
, the pupil is able to build excellent communication skills. From my experience as a teacher, most of the children who are enrolled on a very good
school
 are outspoken, confident, and intelligent compared to the others.
Although
 they both have their merit and demerit, I am strongly in support of registering a
child
 into a standard
school
, where the
child
 can learn a lot.
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