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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Technology plays a big part in our lives more than it used to be; technological devices,
such
 as phones and computers, are primary equipment for everyone. Some people say it is easier to
work
 at
home
; I consider that remote working is not for everyone, and the advantages could not outweigh the disadvantages.
Although
 remote working can be beneficial for several reasons,
such
 as reduced transportation
time
 or flexible working
time
, it is clear that the
less
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fewer
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time
employees
 spend
traveling
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travelling
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 to
work
, the more energy they have left for
work
. So,
work
 at
home
 could make
employees
 have more energy for
work
.
Furthermore
, the
employees
 feel more relaxed in their usual environment; relaxation is sometimes good for those who
work
 in arts and design. People generate new ideas better with a clear mind.
However
, working under relaxed surroundings cannot initiate any pressure, which sometimes requires pushing the
work
 through a deadline. Working without pressure could result in
employees
' less productivity.
In addition
, a distraction from the
home
 atmosphere. The latter can be in different forms; noise, light, or even the internet
connection
. The internet
connection
 is essential for working remotely due to meetings or transferring information. If the
employees
 lose a network
connection
 during an important meeting, their team members might not continue their
work
 in
time
.
Then
, it makes an online meeting more
time
-consuming than a face-to-face meeting. To sum up,
work
 at
home
 can benefit the individuals in terms of reducing travel
time
 to
work
, but there are several drawbacks
such
 as distractions from pets or losing
connection
 during a meeting; none of these issues is in the office.
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