Human activities is damaging the Earth or making it a better place to live? Do you agree or disagree?

For the
last
decades, the number of populations on the earth
jumped
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to billions. With the urge to fulfil all their needs, they are exploiting the globe ever since their creation. These
type
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of activities
then
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whether
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they will
cause
the destruction in the world they are living
or
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they will improve their place to live. I personally believe that the appearance of human
being
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on the earth will
cause
more damage. In
this
essay, I will cover the reasons behind my opinion. No one can argue that the real reason behind building the civilization is to make a better home for all of us, but without the care for surrounding ecosystems, more damages will
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to our world.
First
of all, the development of big cities without any good city plan will
cause
destruction
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of the natural ecosystems.
For instance
, the massive development of reclaimed land to be
housing
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complex will
cause
a disruption and kill the living creatures
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the beach and the sea.
Thus
, it will
also
make the fisherman suffer.
Secondly
, the massive exploitation of
the
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natural resources without any blueprint to make them sustainable will
also
be a reason behind the damage globe. Take the intense use of
fosile
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fossil
fuel during the
last
decade
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example,
this
lead to the depleted amount of oil and gasses around the world. We have known that both of
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could not sustain.
Therefore
, societies tend to explore more in search of other
source
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sources
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resulting
more
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damage everywhere.
Lastly
, our daily activities leave a massive amount of trashes, including undegradable one which
disrupt
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the life of many animals. In summary, with some reasons that I explained in the previous paragraph, I believe that any human activities which focus solely on our advantages will make our planet a worse place to live.
Therefore
, there is a need
of
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better planning which involved the care of surrounding nature to make
earth
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a better place for living.
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