Some people think zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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People have different views about whether
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should be closed due to cruelty or remain to save endangered species. While I believe that
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have advantages to rare
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, and I would like to discuss both
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views as below. On the one hand, some people highlighted those wild
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are born to live free, and it is unnatural and intrinsically cruel to keep them in captivity in
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, extensive ranges of
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are suffering from mental illness in
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.
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conducted by a
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rights group of more than 80
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nationwide suggested that those
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that kept in captivity in
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are 100 times smaller than the minimum home range in their natural habitat are more likely to suffer from abnormal and self-destructive behaviours -
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, pacing, walking in
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circle than those who can rove freely in their natural habitats.
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,
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have provided safe habitats, well-trained zookeepers, and a nurturing environment for taking care of those endangered species that struggling in the wild for many years.
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, those creatures can be encouraged to reproduce with professional medical care in a safe
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. A good example would be
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, an adorable creature
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is
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significant animal in China that almost people from worldwide love. In my opinion,
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case could prove that
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are working to protect
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rare
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from extinction. In conclusion, I do agree that
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' management needs to be improved in terms of
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' welfare, while I still believe that
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are necessary for wild
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  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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