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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

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Many argue that having a
home
 education for
children
 is the best method to introduce
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 important skills to them.
On the other hand
, others might think that there is no substitution for the importance of
school
 learning. From my point of view, I believe that both
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 can benefit positively for each child, and in
this
 essay, I will discuss both constructive effects on
children
 mentality namely increase family bonding and build maximum academic potential.
To begin
 with, one of the most positive impacts
by
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 having
a
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home
 learning sessions for young individuals is they are able to learn things from their loved
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one
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 and it increases family bonding. Rather than learning social ethics attitudes from people that they just met like
school
 teachers, with
home
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the home
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 educational
system
 they will easily accept the study material since their parents will be one of their guides.
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this
 methodology, because
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frequent interaction between them, it
resulting
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 a tighter bonding. On the flip side, formal
school
 educational
system
 known for their own stable curriculums, and
this
 enable them to maximize ones academic's potential.
Children
 surely will learn a lot of compulsory subjects in
school
 including maths, science, and history. They will learn each of those subjects from a teacher that already specialized in those disciplines,
thus
 they will learn from the best.
Furthermore
, they will learn to compete with their classmates, and it forces them to always give their best.
Therefore
,
school
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 environment is the perfect place to polish
children
 true potential. To conclude, in my
opinion
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 both methods have their own positiveness, while the
home
system
 emphasizes more to child mental state by making a good connection between
children
 and the parents, the
school
 educational scheme can enhance ones academic ability.
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  • cater
  • flexible schedule
  • extracurricular activities
  • safe learning environment
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • socialization
  • diversity awareness
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • punctuality
  • resources and facilities
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  • teamwork
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