Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People
 in some countries prefer buying their own 
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 than renting a flat because they think it is very important. 
This
 essay will state two reasons that may cause 
this
 
situation
 and explain why 
this
 is a negative 
situation
. There are two reasons why 
people
 prefer owning a 
house
, Purchasing a 
house
 is a symbol of wealth, Many 
people
 like to show off by buying 
houses
 as 
houses
 are their property, For instance, many Asian countries require males to buy a flat as a wedding gift in order to show that he has the ability to take care of his wife and he is genuine to her. 
Therefore
, many men think it is important to own a 
house
 in order to prove that they are wealthy. In addition, purchasing an apartment  is a safe investment. The 
price
 of a flat is skyrocketing in these few decades, so unlike renting, buying a 
house
 can help 
people
 to build wealth in a quicker way. 
This
 investment has a very low risk because the 
price
 of a 
house
 rarely falls. So many 
people
 think getting a 
house
 is way better than renting one.
However
, there are two reasons why it is a negative 
situation
Firstly
, it causes pressure for 
people
. If 
people
 would like to buy a 
house
, they will have to pay a lot for buying, furnishing and decorating. They may worry that 
this
 target is too difficult to achieve and 
thus
 causes pressure or anxiety. 
Moreover
, the 
price
 of 
houses
 becomes higher because of the increasing demand. As 
people
 prefer buying a flat to renting it, the demand for 
houses
 is higher than the supply, which will 
then
 increase the 
price
 of them. 
This
 will seriously affect the housing market in the long term and make 
people
 in the future do more to buy 
houses
. As a result, it is a negative 
situation
 for society. To conclude, 
people
 buy 
houses
 as investments and 
also
 to show off, 
however
 it may cause negative effects to the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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