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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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In today's society, the majority believe that being rich is the key to stay happy. But other than the money there are some other factors helping people to live a cheerful life. It is obvious, at present you can't survive without a strong cash flow. In order to live comfortably, all you need is to have a rigid income. If you are financially stable you can easily afford a luxurious life and it is so easy to achieve your targets too. For an instance, if you are wealthy enough,
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 you can purchase a mansion close to the beach or on a private island which makes you extremely satisfied and happy for the entire lifetime by treating yourself as a king with a load of joyful activities that you could do.
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, even though you are a billionaire, there are some other facts that you can't afford by paying cash. Being rich might not be a help if you suffer from an incurable disease and it will lead to becoming miserable.
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, there are a lot of situations in which money cannot make you live like a perfect person. As an example,
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 you bought a castle, and if you do not have a family or a close set of friends to share your thoughts you will feel alone and your life becomes so monotonous and
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 the being not mentally stable will not add glow to your soul. So that, it is necessary to think about a balance between physical and mental wealthiness. To conclude, I would say, it is acceptable that being a rich person can lead to having a luxurious stay. But there are many more other reasons especially the spiritual and psychological facts to make a person so joyful and delighted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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