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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others , however , believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Parents
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 are believed that it is their responsibility to educate their
children
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 to be well-mannered members of society.
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 , school is
also
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 supposed to be a good place to teach
children
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 how to be helpful individuals. Generally, I strongly agree with the former for several reasons. On the one hand,
parents
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 should be responsible for teaching their
children
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 at an early age how to be useful people in society.
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 and foremost,
children
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 at
this
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 age are more likely to mimic their
parents
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' behaviours or grandparents' attitudes. If adults do good and live well,
children
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 treat their friends and cousins nicely. Nowadays, the majority of
parents
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 have less time to accompany
children
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 in learning activities but they try to teach their offspring through small talks or playing games.
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, schools should be in charge of training students.
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, students spend most of their time at school so teachers must be the right people to teach them not only academic subjects but
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 moral lessons.
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, most
children
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 actually obey their headteacher much more than their
parents
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.
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 but not least, qualified educators get many styles to approach
children
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 so based on the
children
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's background, they will design proper lessons to help
children
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 realize their mistakes and behave better. In conclusion, I believe that school and
parents
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 hold a shared responsibility in educating
children
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 because they both have direct impacts on forming
children
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's characteristics.
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, both parties must perform their roles well in training their
children
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 to become good and helpful individuals in the community when they grow up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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