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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#wealth #guaranty #happiness
We are living in a world where
money
 has been prioritized in our
lives
. Many people think
money
 brings all the pleasure, is it true? Yet, I believe that
money
 plays a vital part when it comes to our day to day
lives
. But it would not guarantee that only being wealthy brings us all the happiness.
Firstly
, is every person who has
money
 in
this
 world, having a happy and prosperous
life
? The short answer is no. Even though
money
 brings certainty and stability to their
lives
, negative impacts cannot be outweighed. As an example, all the multimillionaires are always living in a fearsome world because they have so much to protect and to lose. And
also
 the risk involves with their businesses are very high. So they have a minimum of two security personnel around them. But for simple individuals, never have those risks in their
lives
.
Secondly
, having said that
money
 cannot buy joy, I cannot justify that citizens live without
money
. We live in the 21st century, whereas
money
 has involvement with everything. At a glance, if you want to travel somewhere by public transportation you need
money
 to buy tickets. Not to mention, you have to pay tax for your own properties too. If you do not have good financial status,
then
 you will struggle in your
life
. To conclude,
Money
 may not be able to complete someone’s
life
 but, without
money
, one’s will be no one. So I partly agreed, being rich does not promise to bring joy to one’s
life
.
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