Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think it should not start until 7 years of age.

The
education
of
children
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a highly debated topic worldwide in our century. It is always argued that classroom
education
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certain
age
,
such
as 7 or 6 in some countries, while others are ardent supporters of the idea that lessons should start earlier.
This
essay agrees with the position that people could start their learning in
school
earlier than
age
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of 7. The idea that toddlers
are often start
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to learn
school
program
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since kindergarten and the argument that several
children
are not ready for
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school
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the
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earlier
age
will be discussed in
this
essay. On the one hand, it is clear that people might have more time to gain knowledge in the
school
if they would start to visit it earlier. It is not
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that
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most part of kindergartens started to give information about math, languages to
children
,
therefore
it means they are ready to start
learning
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process in
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school
.
Consequently
, they will have more time to obtain information, except
this
, earlier
education
will help them to increase their level of interaction in the society in the more fast way. The recent researches depicted that student who starts to visit
school
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the school
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in the
age
of 5 have the higher results, during the examination.
On the other hand
, several
part
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of mankind
are
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strongly convinced that
educational
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system ought to start from the determined
age
which was identified by the government officials.
Although
kindergartens are trying to prepare their students
to
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school
, some kids are not ready for the sophisticated
school
schedule even
in
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the
age
of 7. Their parents are scared that earlier
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in learning will lead to the unfortunate aftermath, just like depression or other mental issues.
For instance
, some
children
could lose their childhood, and start to be closed for communication. To conclude, even though there are several troubles with the earlier
education
, it will be more beneficial to kids.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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