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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many transportive instruments have gotten bigger than past and
this
 result makes problem in the
road
 that some
people
 believe for improvement for
road
 safety should be limited but others think that these are a better method
this
 essay will present both of these different issues. In the contemporary, we are seeing that the roads make types of problems accident,pollution noise and air,increasing rate of victims in the
road
 and the main difficulty for today's
road
 lake of safety in the
road
, many of
people
 don't
use
 transport generally and prefer to
use
 their possess
such
 as car and motor which leads to makes more risk
road
 and decrease secure way,
also
, using transports
such
 as train ,plane and ship , not alone
people
 are come down but they reduce types of pollution noise and air,remove in rushing and bring low the injuries of spring and other body and problems mental
such
 as anxiousness, exhausting and violence in the traffic. In the contrast ,if the roads expand to develop, it will make more improvements in the cities,
for example
,having a
road
 exist some
people
 around the way so humans need their facilities
such
 as hospitals,shopping centres,restaurants and other subjects ,
in addition
 ,
people
 can
use
 their
vehicles
 for saving time and money why using generally transports take a long time,
moreover
,if they
use
 own
vehicles
, will they have a break time, rest in driving,having lunch and other entertainment and every person has a right to
use
 their
vehicles
 for urgency
such
 as go to the hospital, immediate works and so on. The conclusion, having own
vehicles
 should be had right for everyone and these are necessary for nowadays and should be associated to their modern age for expanding the
road
 and can be had every vehicle beside developing roads.
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