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shopping has become a favorite pastime among young people. Do you think they must be encouraged to do other things rather than shopping.

#pastime #people
The line graph compares the
amount
 of CO2 each person emitted in 4 European countries over a
period
 of 40 years. Obviously, emission per person in
UK
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 was by far highest
amount
 over
given
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period
 People
live
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who live
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 in Portugal emitted
negligible
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a negligible
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amount
 of CO2
during
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for
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 40 years. With regards to the
amount
 of emission for each person, Sweden began approximately 9
tonnes
 and
then
 peaked at 10
tonnes
 before falling sharply to about 5
tonnes
 at the end of
period
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the period
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 shown. During the given
period
, according to figures, UK dominated on the graph. In
first
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the first
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 decade,
indicator
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the indicator
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 remained stable, but in
last
 30 years, it decreased dramatically to
amount
 9
tonnes
.
On the other hand
, figures related to Italy and Portugal increased noticeably. İtaly started at
amount
 5 metric
tonnes
 in 1967, while
indicator
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an indicator
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 of Portugal was 1 metric
tonnes
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tonne
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. Between 1977 and 1997, their figures increased slightly and peaked at 8 and 5 metric
tonnes
. At the of
period
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the period
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, they stayed stable
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