convinience foods will become increasingly prevelant and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparing. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Due to the technological advances of the present context,
food
processing
methods
have
also
become increasingly advanced and
therefore
traditional
methods
are being replaced by
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fast and efficient convenience
food
. In my opinion, I agree with the statement and I will
further
elaborate my perspective in
this
essay.
Firstly
, as the
people
are busy with their day to day lives, they have invented
methods
in order to make their lives easier and due to
this
reason
people
have found ways to improve their
food
patterns that
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the
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life styles
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. As
for
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an example, most
of
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the
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individuals are now using
coffee
makers
instead
of the traditional
coffee
making with the use of jugs or they simply buy a
coffee
from a
coffee
shop on the way to their office.
Moreover
,
people
are used to
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fast
food
than
the
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home cooked
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food
as it is convenient for them compared to earlier.
For instance
, working mothers mostly give their children fast
food
and junk
food
since preparing a meal is
time consuming
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. There are several equipment and machines that made life easy to produce
food
nowadays.
In
contrast
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ancient
people
have always used traditional
methods
that are healthy and tasty at the same time. But due to the fact of
limited
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time these all
methods
have currently been replaced by more convenient fast
methods
. Since
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at
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the past
were
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working in paddy fields and
were
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more into agricultural occupations, they always had the motivation to prepare varieties of
food
.
Additionally
, these
methods
are
also
been replaced by
the
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modern
methods
and farmers
also
use
the
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new equipment
to
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cultivation
therefore
rather than
the
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traditional
methods
. To conclude, I believe that traditional
methods
of making
food
are obviously replaced by modern
methods
due to technological improvements in order to make a man’s life easier.
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