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Topic: Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 the major concern of the modern era. A few individuals claim that slow down the speed of
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automobiles
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cars
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 and bikes are
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 terrific method to decrease
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the number of
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 accidents, but the opponents have conflicting views. That essay will
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 discuss both
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views,
then
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 discuss my perspective about it in the subsequent paragraphs. The proponents of the
first
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 view said that people it is good to decrease the speed of vehicles in order to improve the
safety
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 on the
road
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. In
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 way,
rider
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the rider
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 can easily stop their
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 or bikes before crashing
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 any other two or
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wheeler
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. As the result, neither will occur any mishappening
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road
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 nor any threat to life during riding on the vehicles. To cite an example,
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 year, I was going to my town on my bike and at that time, there was fog in the surroundings, but I was riding my bike
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 above the speed of
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forty
our
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kilometre
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meter
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 per one hour.
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, a child came into my way, but I was
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successfully
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 stoped my bike since of low speed. The opponents of the
first
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 view claimed that there are other methods too to upgrade
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safety
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 are ethier citizens should follow the traffic rules or Government should imply the
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 rules for
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. In
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 law, one day only the
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 who have
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 number in the
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 should
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 on the
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 as well as the
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 day for even number car.
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, it will lead to
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 chances of happening any risk of life or probably reduces the possibilities of car
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crashing
 with each other.
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, in the year
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2019, the chief minister of
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,
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 Arwind
kezriwal
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Kejriwal
was implement
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 the
odd-even
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 law for
cars
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. After that, the
numbers
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 of
cars
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 accidents were reduced by 25% according to the data of
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 department. In conclusion, it is believed that
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road
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safety
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 will improve by the
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 in the speed of
motobikes
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motorbikes
 and
cars
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,
but
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odd-even
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the odd-even
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 rule is
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a more
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 effective method than it.
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, it is better to establish the
odd-even
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 rule for improving
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road
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safety
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 rather than slowing the vehicles speed.
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