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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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The bar chart and the table illustrate the export earnings in five different categories in billions and the percentage change relative to the previous year for two years periods (2015 and 2016). Overall, four categories of
products
 have increased their
sales
 in 2016 except gem and jewellery. The highest-earning achieved by engineered goods while textile having largest percentage change compared to
last
 year in 2016. The agricultural
products
 could achieve the lowest proportional change compared to
last
 year. The highest earned
products
 in 2016 were petroleum and engineered goods having around 60 billion dollars, yet it was 3% and 8.5% compared to the previous year’s
sales
. Agricultural
products
 could earn merely 1% of profit compared to 2015 while the textile industry had the largest proportion about 15.24%
sales
 which are approximately 30 billion dollars which is similar to the
sales
 done by agricultural
products
.
However
, the gem and jewellery industry could not show growth but having a reduction of
sales
 of exactly 5.18% compared to 2015.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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