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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#country #language
Language
 has a pivotal role in our day
today
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 life. Every
language
 has its own importance.
People
 give high priority to their mother tongue, due to
the
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easy communication. While living in another
country
people
 may communicate with their
language
, it can be lead to some serious issues,
therefore
,
this
 essay totally
agree
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 with the statement that speaking
foreign
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language
 in a
country
 can cause adverse effects .
Firstly
,
language
 is an excellent mode of communication.
People
 can transmit their ideas and views easily. In order to
fulfill
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 their
needs
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 one must speak the way, which other person should understand. If a person is failed to transfer their thoughts, it could be a terrible situation.
For example
, if a person
unable
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 to speak
in
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the local
language
, may not be aware
about
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 the cultural practices of the concerned area, because of
the
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insufficient communication with the native
people
.
This
 can be lead to cultural shock.
Secondly
,
language
 is enabling
the
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people
 to communicate effectively in their
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workplace
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work place
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. Even though
people
 succeed in their targets, they may not be revealing it to others, because of the inconvenient usage of foreign
language
. It may affect their career.
Thirdly
,
People
 can face social ignorance in the host
country
 due to the use of
foreign
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language
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. They may fail to expose themselves. Particularly, they might not be active in any events or social activities. It can lead to social isolation and irritation. To sum up, while living in a foreign
country
, it is advisable to speak in
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local
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language
, in order to avoid practical and social problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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