More and more people are now moving away from an agricultural background to cities for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solution you can offer?

one of the gravest problems of our modern society can be the immigration from rural areas to
cities
.
People
claim there are more job offers in urban places,
hence
they leave their villages to find better opportunities.
However
, the drawbacks of
such
happening cannot be overlooked, some of which will be mentioned here and some solutions regarding
this
issue will be offered.
To begin
with, one can shed a light on one of the consequences which
is
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more crowded
cities
. The more groups leave villages, the more polluted and busier
cities
we will face.
For instance
, in the past ten ,years the number of deserted countrysides have grown due to the migration of its inhabitants, in order to find better occupations.
Hence
urban areas became harder to live in.
Additionally
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it must not be forgotten that the other disadvantage of
such
happening is lack of food and supply. Not only will the young generation abandon their homeland, but they
also
forget about their main job which is farming. ,
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the number of
people
who are willing to work on the farms will decrease and on bigger ,scales the whole country will face difficulties providing
people
with food and ingredients. To continue, some solutions could be offered which are pretty practical and convenient to apply. For ,example providing villagers with more facilities, so they will not need to seek refuge in bigger towns.
Moreover
, governments can allocate more budget to agricultural activities and support
people
who are working on farms. To make it more tangible, we can refer to Hungary which overcame
this
issue pretty well, by giving more benefits to the ones who are living in the countrysides and taking care of all of their premier and superior needs.
Hence
they did not feel being subsided and the number of immigrants dropped significantly. All in all, migration from rural areas is concerning especially in our modern society. Serious actions must be taken against
such
an issue unless, it will affect everything, from making big
cities
more crowded to lack of food and supply. But it will not be well taken care of without governments' help and support.
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