The internet has changed the way we communicate. Much communication today happens through social media. Some people support this and think it is a positive development. Others believe that social media have negative effects. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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is being discussed the impacts that the
internet
, more specifically, social
media
, has
in
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the way that we communicate nowadays.
Although
some argue that
this
new way of communicating has a favourable outcome, others believe that it had a negative impact
in
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our society. On one
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it
its
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possible to argue that social
media
and the
internet
allow for more
people
to be connected, by making
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it possible
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that we stay in touch with individuals that
otherwise
we would not.
Therefore
, in
this
sense, social
media
is bringing
people
closer together, facilitating communication and, as a consequence, resulting in a positive development for society.
For example
, as a social
media
participant, I am connected with
people
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I grew up with or who studied with me and do not live in Brazil anymore. I can find
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by searching for them
in
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a
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social
media
, which would
otherwise
be very difficult.
On the other hand
, it is
also
possible to sustain that being in contact with
people
through social
media
is too artificial and that we are not connected at all,
on the contrary
, we are just learning facts about
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others.
For example
, you could learn from a post that someone else got married or had a child. Probably you would have received that information without
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.
However
, just knowing that information do not
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bring you closer to that person. You still do not know his/her feelings, real situation and so on. In my experience, I rarely talk or write to my friends
in
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social
media
. To conclude, in my view, social
media
has to be used with caution as it may
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more
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that
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than
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positive
effect
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. I do believe that
internet
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the internet
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and social
media
are only creating a false sense of connection and creating negative consequences for
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant communication
  • global connectivity
  • networking opportunities
  • data privacy
  • data breaches
  • mental health issues
  • excessive use
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • feelings of loneliness
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • public misinformation
  • societal harm
  • shared interests
  • engaged
  • foster communities
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