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Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, people believe that modern
music
 could be dangerous,
expecially
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especially
 for
younger
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,
on the contrary
, others argued that modern
music
 could provide beneficial consequences to listeners. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views as well as why I believe that it can be extremely
usefull
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useful
,
in particular
 for youth.
Firstly
, I think that every society has its own
genere
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genre
 of
music
 due to the
fact
 that musician instrument developed during the year and
also
 the mind of people changed as a consequence that preferences could be different compared with the past. The
fact
 is provided by the number of variations that every kind of
music
 experienced during their life, in
fact
, several
singer
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are
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is
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 not related to only one
genere
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genre
 of
music
 but we can catalogue in many of them. For
this
reason
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 I do not think that modern
music
 can be dangerous for young people because I can not find negative effects related to that.
Although
 I believe that there will not be
problem
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a problem
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 among younger, others argued that modern
music
 can have a negative impact on modern society in light of the
fact
 that it can influence listeners to copy the action of
singer
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the singer
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 which sometimes are lead to negative effects,
forr
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for
 example smoking weed or having a gangster behaviour. In conclusion, as I said, I believe that there will not a problem for young who
listen
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 modern
music
 due to the
fact
 that all
the
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apply
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society
have
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has
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 experienced a particular kind of
music
 which often are dangerous whit violent texts and bad words.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifestyles and behaviours
  • glorify
  • distract
  • academic performance
  • self-expression
  • identity formation
  • source of inspiration
  • social and political messages
  • amplifying
  • accessible
  • influential
  • parental and educational guidance
  • critically analyze
  • responsible consumption
  • mitigate
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