Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, people believe that modern
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could be dangerous,
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,
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, others argued that modern
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could provide beneficial consequences to listeners. In
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essay, I am going to discuss both views as well as why I believe that it can be extremely
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useful
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for youth.
Firstly
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, I think that every society has its own
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genre
of
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due to the
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that musician instrument developed during the year and
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the mind of people changed as a consequence that preferences could be different compared with the past. The
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is provided by the number of variations that every kind of
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experienced during their life, in
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, several
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not related to only one
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genre
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but we can catalogue in many of them. For
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I do not think that modern
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can be dangerous for young people because I can not find negative effects related to that.
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I believe that there will not be
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among younger, others argued that modern
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can have a negative impact on modern society in light of the
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that it can influence listeners to copy the action of
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which sometimes are lead to negative effects,
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for
example smoking weed or having a gangster behaviour. In conclusion, as I said, I believe that there will not a problem for young who
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modern
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due to the
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that all
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society
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experienced a particular kind of
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which often are dangerous whit violent texts and bad words.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifestyles and behaviours
  • glorify
  • distract
  • academic performance
  • self-expression
  • identity formation
  • source of inspiration
  • social and political messages
  • amplifying
  • accessible
  • influential
  • parental and educational guidance
  • critically analyze
  • responsible consumption
  • mitigate
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