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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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We live in a world where everyone has a right to decide whatever they want to do in their life. Some folks think that the legal
age
 at which people can marry should be at least 21. Well, I strongly agree with
this
 statement and I am going to explain my point of view in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, In many
countries
 the legal
age
 where a person can marry is 21. Well, there is a lot of reasons behind
this
 decision, one of them at
this
age
 most the adults become independent in their life and start making money and decisions on their own, which make them perfect future parents. Another reason is they can find a perfect match for themselves because at
this
age
 they know how things work.
Moreover
, After the 20s majority of the adults get enough knowledge which helps them to shape their future" better future is equal to a better life and better parenthood". In many
countries
such
 as Japan, India and China legal
age
 where a boy or girl can marry is 21 and 18 respectively, and I think
this
 is what all
countries
 need to do to make a 21
age
 where a person can marry.
Last
 but to least, According to
me
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, it's better for all of us to before we do something or before we take an important decision that can change our lives forever. At the
age
 of 21 minds can process things easily that we cannot process. In many western ,
countries
 they marry at the
age
 of 16 or 18
hence
 we can see many divorces happened even before they entered their 20s, so I want people to think and take a step.
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  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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