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Some people think that with the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, people lose the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is being argued that because
people
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 are spending more
time
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 using mobile phones and computers, they are
forgeting
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forgetting
 how to interact in a
face
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 to
face
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 situation. I disagree with
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 opinion as I believe that
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interaction through the
Internet
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 does not change significantly our communication skills. It is a fact that the use of the
Internet
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, since its invention, is
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growing
 substantially.
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 technology is improving constantly,
in
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 an amazing rate, making
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access easier and cheaper every day. Nowadays, there is a huge variety of equipment allowing consumers to choose from a cheaper model to a very expensive one.
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, when mobile phones were launched in Brazil, there was a waiting list to get one and the price was almost the same as a car.
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, the telecommunication providers charged a very high fee. That
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 changed and connection costs are more
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accessible
. An illustration of
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 the possibility to buy one month
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Internet
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of Internet
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acess
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access
 for around ten US dollars. As
people
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 had more access they increased the
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 they spend
navegating
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navigating
 online.
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, spending more
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 connected does not mean necessarily that
people
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 are not allocating
time
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 to meet their friends and relatives.
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, the
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 used on mobile phones and computers could in the past have
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 used for reading newspapers, books
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on
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 paper or playing games. Actually, the
Internet
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 makes
possible
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it possible
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 for us to
communitate
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communicate
 with
people
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 that live far from us,
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 creating more
possibily
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possibility
possibly
 for interactions.
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,
communications
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communication
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on line
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online
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requires
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 almost the same set of skills as
face
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 to
face
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. To conclude, the increase in the usage of online equipment does give new options for spending
time
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 but it does not have a negative impact on relationships.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • interpersonal skills
  • overreliance
  • digital communication platforms
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • social bonds
  • enhance
  • bridging long distances
  • fostering connections
  • age groups
  • adept
  • integrating
  • landscape
  • emotional intelligence
  • nuances
  • striking a balance
  • limitations
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