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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree and disagree

#people #music #cultures #ages
The
process
 diagram illustrates, information about generating electricity in a hydroelectric power plant. Overall , the
process
 gives us information about
day
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daytime
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time
 operation with High -
level
reservoir
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reservoirs
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 to generating electricity and nighttime operation of refill upper
reservoir
 using the lower-
level
reservoir
. In
day
time
 operation,
water
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the water
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 flow of the river has blocked by the dam and it created the
reservoir
 in the upper
level
.
Then
 the collected
water
 drives through pipes to the power station that was located in the lower
level
. In the
next
 ,stage
water
 pressure makes the rotation of turbine blades and generate electricity that can be provided to the national grid through power lines. During
this
day
time
process
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 the excess
water
 has lower
this
day
time
process
 the
water
 has been collected in a lower
level
reservoir
 and it pumps back to the upper dam in night
time
 using turbines reverse as a pump. So, the intake of the upper dam works two ways in
day
 and night
time
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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