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In some cities people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is replacing cars. why is this the case? which development do you think this better?

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The development of businesses has given rise to the growing tendency of commercial advertising. From my point of view,
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 trend could have both positive or negative influences. It is undoubted that the acceleration of advertising can bring numerous benefits.From the economic perspective thanks to the large scale expansion of advertisements, more
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 are sold, leading to an increase in the profit figures of businesses. In order to meet the increasing demand of
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 of consumers, the manufacturer would expand production hire more employees and contribute to the decline in the unemployment rate.
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, advertising has positive effects on people's feelings. Some advertisements contain funny images and content is a huge source of entertainment for children. It is advertising that keeps people posted on information about
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 and services. These customers have more choice to decide which one is suitable for them feeling satisfied when buying desired
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. Despite the great advantages of advertising developments, I insist that it
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 exerts several undesirable impacts.
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, advertising about soft drinks, fast food , canned food prompts unhealthy eating, especially when the target customers are children. In reality, the young generation is heading toward some life-threatening diseases namely fatigue cardiovascular cancer which is caused by the habit of overeating
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 junk foods.
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, advertising encourages people to purchase what they do not really need. The information about
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 on the internet is not censored ,
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 it is unreliable and can mislead the customers to buy
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 which are of little use to them. In conclusion, according to all the above explanations . I claim that the increase of advertisement in modern society has a positive impact as well as detrimental influences on our life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sprawling urban areas
  • infrastructure
  • carbon footprints
  • dedicated bike lanes
  • bike-sharing programs
  • compact urban design
  • sustainable
  • pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • livable
  • physical activity
  • reducing stress levels
  • alleviated
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