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Reading is more educational than watching videos or TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most
children
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 have become more addicted to games and
tv
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 more than reading.lt is believed that
children
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 who read learn
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 faster than playing games and watching
tv
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. I somewhat agree with the statement.
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Firstly
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, reading has always been a great
way
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 to educate
children
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, young or old.
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 if a child is given a book to read they concentrate and have time to ask questions if needed. Another example is that if kids are taught using a book, it means they have a chance to underline or highlight what they don't understand and get back to it, which becomes a great
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 of mastering words
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,
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 generation of the 21st century have initiated different ways of learning including
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 and
tv
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children
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 do learn from watching
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 and playing
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 but the problem is they lose concentration when they are having fun and
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 focus
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 there is no chance of grabbing new words to learn. The drawback in watching
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 and
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 is that u can not pause if there is something u don't understand so learning becomes less. To sum up, l believe it is clear that reading is the best
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 to teach a child , and improve their learning skills,
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videos
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 and
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 a
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 of learning
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they do not outweigh the reading technique.
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