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Reading is more educational than watching videos or TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#videos #tv
Most
children
 have become more addicted to games and
tv
 more than reading.lt is believed that
children
 who read learn
everyday
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 faster than playing games and watching
tv
. I somewhat agree with the statement.
Furstly
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Firstly
First
, reading has always been a great
way
 to educate
children
, young or old.
For
example
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 if a child is given a book to read they concentrate and have time to ask questions if needed. Another example is that if kids are taught using a book, it means they have a chance to underline or highlight what they don't understand and get back to it, which becomes a great
way
 of mastering words
Secondly
,
this
 generation of the 21st century have initiated different ways of learning including
videos
 and
tv
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however
children
 do learn from watching
tv
 and playing
videos
 but the problem is they lose concentration when they are having fun and
loose
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lose
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 focus
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therefore
 there is no chance of grabbing new words to learn. The drawback in watching
videos
 and
tv
 is that u can not pause if there is something u don't understand so learning becomes less. To sum up, l believe it is clear that reading is the best
way
 to teach a child , and improve their learning skills,
although
videos
 and
tv
 are
also
 a
way
 of learning
but
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they do not outweigh the reading technique.
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