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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days exploring space is interesting. So, some
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 think that it will have a great impact on the Earth and may solve the issues on Earth. While others believe that if we did not reach any support tell now it may risk living organisms. In case we don't reach out enough knowledge. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and I will draw my conclusion. On one hand, some
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 believe that space includes unknown resources.
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, it is interesting to research the unknown things as it is a
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 nature. To illustrate, it is may find a new life on another planet like scientists prove that Mars has the same characteristics as Earth. May we find
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 leaving there in Masr and it will be and add to our plant. May we easily deal with our issues and it will not be a loss. So, that's why some think that exploring space is beneficial.
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, we may lose our resources and we can not solve our current problems.
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, we may lose both. To illustrate, every living organism has its lifetime.
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, it will die and we could not create it again. Like there is a gap in the ozone layer.
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, it affects all of us as it protects us from carbon dioxide.
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 to oxygen decreases that lead to death.
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 proves clearly that the current resource will vanish. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both views. I believe that being in the middle is the best choice.
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