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Some people say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work Is hard worknow the key to success, or is talent also important Give reason for your anewer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Successful is given in the different meaning in each
people
 while some
people
 think it is the most proportion, around 90 from hard
work
 and 10 proportion is from talent. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
 statement that the most key to
success
 is hard
work
, and the following examples will be provided to support my point of view.
To begin
 with, the key to
success
 is from hard
work
 mostly. The reason is that
people
 can learn and practice whatever they would have to get accomplishment, do it over and over again is brought to skills and professional to
people
.
For instance
, according to my experience, I never have done cooking before until I had to live alone in Australia and
also
 I needed to find a job which could get by myself,
therefore
 I
applied
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 a job in a Thai restaurant which was the easiest one for the student who just leaves a home. I learnt many things and started with a kitchenhand who was chopping and washing the vegetables, after around 5 months I got promoted to be head chief
finally
.
Therefore
, I definitely think
people
 can succeed whatever they want if they task hard enough and do not give up on all obstacles which would have to test their attention.
Secondly
, I think
success
 would come with an enthusiastic person. It is clear to see if some
people
 have a talent for something, but they do not practice or strive or abandon,
,
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 it would not have meaning to them. In
conversely
,
people
 who would keep their ability by practising, it would be lead to be successful
people
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that hard
work
 is the important key to
success
 because if
people
 have talent without diligence, they would not get accomplishment definitely.
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