Some people say that the purpose of education for individuals is to be useful to the society, while others argue that the purpose is to fulfill personal ambitions of an individual. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is considered by some
people
that
education
for a person is in line with
individual’s
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personal ambitions, whereas there are others who think that it should be helpful to
the
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society
. While
education
is used for the community, I believe that
education
will be better for the individual
people
to improve their
knowledge
. On the one hand, there are a lot of good ways to use
education
for
society
– it is to share
with
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their opinion and
knowledge
with other
people
.
This
is essential to gain important information,
such
as professional skills and cultural norms.
For example
, there are teachers who share their own experiences. Students take the
the
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most interesting and the most significant information from teachers in order to know a lot. So, it will be more useful for
the
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society
.
On the other hand
,
education
take
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people
’s 11 or 12 years not to waste their
knowledge
to
society
, but to be successful for themselves. In
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there are many schools that can help to find their careers that will be
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a benefit
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for their future.
For instance
, in NIS schools’ student-graduates who study at Nazarbayev University, in order to improve their own
knowledge
, work in the best place where they have a good salary.
Therefore
,
education
should help
to
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people
to realise their personal ambitions and dreams. In conclusion, I will say that there are many good ways to help
society
with
education
,
although
teaching will be better for improving
people
's own
knowledge
,
also
helps
people
to be more responsible and useful for development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • beneficial
  • society
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • civic responsibility
  • active participation
  • social initiatives
  • societal issues
  • solutions
  • specialized professions
  • personal growth
  • self-fulfillment
  • passions
  • interests
  • potential
  • talents
  • job prospects
  • financial stability
  • balance
  • meaningful
  • foundation
  • emphasis
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