in the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without face to face contact with other. it is possitive or negative development in the opinion ?
many
people
believe that the development of the internet
makes people
's life
much more
easier Change the word
apply
such
as shopping, working or even though meeting friend without face to face. in my perspective, people
must balance the time that they use it.
on the one hand, there is no doubt that people
are living in modernization and innovation of the world with the extreme development of the internet
. because of that, people
also
handle an abundance of problems without leaving their home
. living in Fix the agreement mistake
homes
busy
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a busy
the busy
life
, it is such
a difficulty when they want to hang out and go shopping. moreover
, the internet
is play
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is playing
an
fundamental role Change the article
a
for
contacting Change preposition
in
with
their friends despite Change preposition
apply
of
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a
huge distance. Change the word
their
for example
, because of pandemic
period, Add an article
the pandemic
people
must do every activities
on Change to a singular noun
activity
thr
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the
internet
which becomes only
way to receive outside Add an article
the only
informations
.
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information
pieces of information
on the other hand
, with the widespread of the internet
, people
absolutely become slaver of the internet
, they will loss
not only the ability of Replace the word
lose
multisolving
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multi solving
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
less
confidences when they need real meetings in daily Change the quantifier
fewer
life
. nowadays the young generation become
quite lazy, they always Change the verb form
becomes
saty
at home and use the Correct your spelling
stay
say
internet
as main
tool to meet Change the article
the main
demand
for everything. it is obvious that they will less sensitive of Add an article
the demand
life
as a robot which is attributed to the fact that their life
is definitely tedious. for instance
, in Vietnam the percentage of children who have mental problems is high which is propotional
with the Correct your spelling
proportional
internet
growth. they don't have any friends, and keep using the internet
all the time.
in conclusion, people
will be accepted for both pros and cons of the internet
, but they must have to adapt and control their responsibilities hat help them avoid the internet
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite