in the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without face to face contact with other. it is possitive or negative development in the opinion ?

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many
people
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believe that the development of the
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makes
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's
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easier
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as shopping, working or even though meeting friend without face to face. in my perspective,
people
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must balance the time that they use it. on the one hand, there is no doubt that
people
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are living in modernization and innovation of the world with the extreme development of the
internet
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. because of that,
people
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also
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handle an abundance of problems without leaving their
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life
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, it is
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a difficulty when they want to hang out and go shopping.
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, the
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fundamental role
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contacting
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their friends despite
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huge distance.
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, because of
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period,
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must do every
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on
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the
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which becomes
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way to receive outside
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.
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, with the widespread of the
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,
people
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absolutely become slaver of the
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, they will
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not only the ability of
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but
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confidences when they need real meetings in daily
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. nowadays the young generation
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quite lazy, they always
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stay
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at home and use the
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as
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tool to meet
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for everything. it is obvious that they will less sensitive of
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as a robot which is attributed to the fact that their
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is definitely tedious.
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, in Vietnam the percentage of children who have mental problems is high which is
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proportional
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growth. they don't have any friends, and keep using the
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all the time. in conclusion,
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will be accepted for both pros and cons of the
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, but they must have to adapt and control their responsibilities hat help them avoid the
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's damnation
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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