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Sompe poeple believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disgaree. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your own opinion.

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It is alleged by some people that
bike
 executes the role of the best type of transport in urban areas, while other groups of people think differently. Consuming
bicycles
 as a way to move around in the municipality would certainly facilitate movement
however
 there will
also
 be some drawbacks. Primarily, one evident benefit to having a
bike
 in metropolitan areas is that it would enable one to ride a
bicycle
 without traffic problems.
In other words
, the rider of a
bicycle
 can effortlessly avoid traffic issues like traffic jams.
Moreover
, there is no consumption of fuel. All the pedals need is the well-timed repair and replacing of necessary details.
Bike
 maintenance costs almost nothing. Provided
bike
 owner serves
bicycle
 correct and relevant, the
bike
, having a large reserve of resources, will serve the owner for a rather long time.
For example
, a flat tire is a maximum setback, which consumers will face.
In addition
, there is no complicated structure in bikes compared to other vehicles, which illustrates the cost-effectiveness of
this
 method of travel around the city.
On the other hand
, despite these prerogatives, there are obvious disadvantages of bikes.
Bicycles
 can not demonstrate high efficiency between the modes of transport. Pedals are not powered enough to surmount far distances. The dynamics of the
bicycle
 are depended on human beings.
Although
bike
 consumes zero oil for transporting, there is the miniature amount of speed indicators. Users of
bicycles
also
 can be reluctant to ride
bicycles
 for a great distance. It is an obvious instance of pedals' weak point. In my opinion, everyone should decide on their own what type of conveyance is appropriate for them, since there are various criteria to select a vehicle. Taking everything into account, while there are plus points of applying bikes in the urban areas, weaknesses of
this
 way of moving was introduced more than privileges.
Bicycle
 is the best transport in terms of price/quality ratio,
however
, a
bicycle
 has a low productivity level.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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