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In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Criminal
proceedings
 are broadcast on television for the general public in certain countries. In my opinion, while
this
 may create awareness about judicial
proceedings
, the drawbacks of
this
 practice outweigh the benefits. Admittedly, there are some advantages to showing criminal trials on television.
This
 creates awareness among the common
people
 about the procedures involved in the trial. It
also
 enables
people
 to learn about the various provisions of the law.
For example
, in most countries, a murder committed in self-defence is not punishable. When
people
 watch these shows they become aware of
such
 aspects of the law. Sometimes the airing of trial procedures
also
 enables
people
 to get justice faster. In many countries, judicial procedures are extremely slow and sometimes it takes several years for victims to get justice. When
people
 learn about
such
 delays through these programmes, they may demand speedy delivery of justice.
Nevertheless
, the downsides of
this
 practice are more dangerous.
For example
, it could teach criminals ways to escape from punishment and might
also
 violate human rights. As part of the court hearing, detailed visualization of the crime scene would be given. Potential criminals may plot similar crimes after watching these
proceedings
. They may
also
 learn about the loopholes in the law that would help them to get away. Another imperative concern is that sometimes young children could be the victim or the culprit. In both cases, showing their faces or family members during the trials may cause psychological disturbance in them as well as in society. They may face bullying or isolation from the
people
 who watched them on TV.
Thus
, the public hearing on national television tutors the criminals about the loopholes in the system and psychologically affects the victims and the accused. In conclusion,
although
 there are merits to both sides of
this
 argument, I think that the damage that could happen due to the airing of criminal
proceedings
 would have more detrimental effects on society than the benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • transparency
  • public oversight
  • judicial system
  • educational value
  • privacy concerns
  • re-traumatizing
  • juror behavior
  • fairness
  • public opinion
  • media sensationalism
  • impartiality
  • economic benefits
  • legal proceedings
  • misinterpretation
  • broadcasters
  • legal institutions
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