Museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not by local people. Why is this so? What could be done to encourage more local visitors? Please include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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These days,
museums
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are one of the few
places
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which connect humankind with the roots of cultures and traditions.
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, these
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become an attractive spot only for foreigners over the potential years as native
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go rarely there. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will elucidate the possible reasons and propose a handful of remedial measures. To commence with, the reason
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myriad to support
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notion.
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and foremost, local
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especially youth feel boring and dull in
museums
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. They lack interest and knowledge in history and do not want to explore
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their ancestors. To explicate, these days
people
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visit those
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where they find more amusement and
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when they aware about them
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in
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they feel totally blank due to devoid of comprehensive knowledge about past.
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, nowadays, modern parents have busy schedules and they could not able to teach
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their juveniles about
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ancient things.
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, they prefer to explore more
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locations rather than
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.
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of all,
museums
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should be made more interesting so that the young ones and the community want to visit them.
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, the government can add some audio-visual aids at
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places
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which will describe
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the
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ancient times.
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, in schools history subject should be emphasised by making it more fun rather than boring.
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, parents should take their infants to
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from an early age and build their interest. To sum it up, the government play an essential role in
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matter. They could hire more teachers in schools for spreading awareness among children and through advertisements in local
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about the past time
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In
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way, native
people
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will start exploring
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places
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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