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Environment protection should be the responsibility of politicians, not indiviuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, who is responsible for environmental protection is a controversial topic. While environmental protection should be responsible to
governments
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 and large companies, I cannot entirely agree with the view since
individuals
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’ efforts to preserve the
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 should be underestimated. The prevailing view is that environmental issues are global and need to be addressed by
governments
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, public interest organisations and NGOs and that the power of the individual is too small to make a difference. Like global warming, it is not a regional catastrophe and requires all authorities to work together to plan improvements, bear the costs and share the risks, whereas
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 cannot afford to spend so much and do not have the think tanks to tackle the problem.
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, it is not only large economies,
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 as corporate groups, that have a social responsibility to protect the
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 but
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individuals
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, who share the same sky, have an obligation to make changes where they can. There are many things that
individuals
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 can do to improve the
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,
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 as separating waste properly, not using plastic bags, even taking public transport more often, and implementing environmental policies set by authorities. More importantly, if everyone acts,
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 what would
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 be a weak individual force will converge into a significant social force that will rival the
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. In conclusion, I reiterate my view that while
governments
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 and large corporations are undoubtedly more responsible and capable of protecting the
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,
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 can
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 make their own contribution to improving the
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, rather than just relying on institutions and enjoying the fruits of their actions.
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